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PostPosted: Mon Apr 08, 2019 3:44 pm 
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I wanted to make a certain character stretch his muscles, so to speak...

Warshapers (1.2k words)

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 08, 2019 8:12 pm 
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This Playwrite sure likes causing trouble. What is it with these creative types?

I don't have a whole lot to say about the story. Obviously, it is very similar to the climactic fight in Ruwin's "How to Trade a Planeswalker," with Syl getting taken out of the action right away and then Chardis being somewhat pressed. Obviously, Fisco bolted, which was probably for the best, but Jack's got Fisco beat in the physicality category, at least will all his stuff on.

I don't know how much this is supposed to represent canon Jack, but I will say that I wasn't overly thrilled with the darksteel (which should be unique to Mirrodin/New Phyrexia) or the rifle (which in my opinion should be unique to Jakkard). I liked the use of the Arbalest, though, and while it is very powerful, the concept of Jack's runes basically changing his armor into another MTG armor is a pretty cool idea.

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I wasn't overly thrilled with the darksteel (which should be unique to Mirrodin/New Phyrexia)

This is one of the reasons why I made this. Observations:
-Just designing a knock-off darksteel would be lame, in my opinion, but someone with Jack's skills and resources could be probably able to craft something similar on his own;
-Wurmcoil Engine also comes from the same plane (but is obviously way less iconic), and I found out later that myr design is property of Memnarch, off all individuals;
-Alessa has a darksteel pendant, and a nameless merchant somewhere is aware of darksteel's existence. So it's not that exclusive to the plane.
-Last but not least, Barinellos implied that Maral would be willing to forge darksteel pieces on request. It's a matter of debate whether Jack might be able to learn how to forge it from a finished piece, but it's easy to imagine him encountering her handiwork on multiple planes and deciding to pay her a visit. He'd just need the giant-sized plates, the exoskeleton within he could make on his own.

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or the rifle (which in my opinion should be unique to Jakkard).

Hm, that's a problem of description, I think. That rifle shoots stuff similar to Sunlances (basically a magical laser rifle, or a weapon-shaped Isochron Scepter), and in my head its design it resembles the energy cannons mentioned in The Thran, but I didn't know how much I could get away with in Chardis' description of it.

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I liked the use of the Arbalest, though

To be honest I was saddened by the lack of non-creature artifact ballista cards, so I had to adapt :D

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while it is very powerful, the concept of Jack's runes basically changing his armor into another MTG armor is a pretty cool idea.

Thank you! That's his Thoughtsilver mantle, which in Broken Stars turned into a pair of bladed wings. During intense fights he turns it into additional plating which grants properties to the underlying armor.

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PostPosted: Sat Apr 13, 2019 5:00 pm 
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In celebration for Orcish returning, I have decided to write a battle between Beryl and Aloise!

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PostPosted: Sat Apr 13, 2019 5:23 pm 
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I was going to comment on this line:

Just then, the door opened and the page walked in. “It’s time.”

But then I didn't have to.

Also, I imagined this whole thing in over-the-top Gainax animation style, or maybe the psychadelic style of Kick-Heart.

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PostPosted: Sun Apr 14, 2019 6:08 am 
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The page... :face:

Aw, things like these make me feel like a jerk for pitting random characters to fight to the death for my enjoyment...

*looks at the previous sentence*

Um. Ehm. Did you decide the meaning of the TWIST acronym, Raven? :blush:

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Um. Ehm. Did you decide the meaning of the TWIST acronym, Raven? :blush:

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PostPosted: Wed Jun 12, 2019 6:51 pm 
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The biggest problem with fighting a geomancer is that you're always losing ground...

:shifty:

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Anyway, this definitely showcases the immense power scale of these two characters as they tear up the plane dueling with one another. It's interesting, though appropriate, that Ungar doesn't fight directly, but rather relies on his summonings. Tulemnak takes the more flighty approach by saying "I'm going to land on you..."

:paranoid:

As someone who has written for both Lukas Harran and Fisco Vane, I think the thing that piqued my interest the most was the note about Khoramex. Ungar's minor nuisance in trying to control the demon reminded me a lot of Lukas's exchanges with Vendris and his horror at first seeing Xeran in action. Demons, it seems, do not typically like to be controlled.

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PostPosted: Wed Jan 06, 2021 1:44 pm 
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@Cloistered Youth: Nice. The fight is quite visceral, as you would expect any fight to the death, and particularly between these two. I think my favorite thing here was your description of Dorn's armor and shield melting away from him. That was nicely done. And Sharaka's little flirtatious moment in the middle was a nice bit of levity amidst the otherwise serious danger of the scene. It makes me wonder what might have happened to both characters had they happened on one another earlier in their timelines, like, say, Dorn crashing Sophron's party, or even as Sharaka was being taken originally. Her canon view of humans would, I imagine, only have been fed by Dorn's racist rhetoric, and who knows where it would have gone. I imagine I would not like that Sharaka as much as the canon one.

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@Cloistered Youth: Nice. The fight is quite visceral, as you would expect any fight to the death, and particularly between these two.

And especially written by me, I'd add :V Amaruo vs Xant was a somewhat dignified magic duel, and Jack vs Chardis was more a superhero fight than a deathmatch, but the Sharaka ones... yeah. She is all about heart, flesh and guts, either meaning "emotion, passion and courage" or... more literal gore :D

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I think my favorite thing here was your description of Dorn's armor and shield melting away from him. That was nicely done. And Sharaka's little flirtatious moment in the middle was a nice bit of levity amidst the otherwise serious danger of the scene.

The melting sentence was rewritten quite a few times, as it is the moment Dorn's physical AND emotional defenses crumble. And Sharaka's line... let's say I tried some more serious taunting for size but she went for randomly horny instead :D

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It makes me wonder what might have happened to both characters had they happened on one another earlier in their timelines, like, say, Dorn crashing Sophron's party, or even as Sharaka was being taken originally. Her canon view of humans would, I imagine, only have been fed by Dorn's racist rhetoric, and who knows where it would have gone. I imagine I would not like that Sharaka as much as the canon one.

I shuddered once at considering at this possibility, but now... let me think.

Spiteful!Sharaka would be abrasive rather than teasing. The sense of humor would remain, albeit much darker and offensive. She'd travel with Dorn for a time, but aside from the completely paces they have, both in and off combat... she was dosed with viashino supremacy from birth. She'd start to look down on her companion, because only viashino have pure Fire, a true soul. That would come to a quite ugly point sooner or later.

Basically, they'd be an interesting chance to show how personalities founded on hate can latch to each other in a supremely toxic relationship, I think.

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Starring a character I'm toying with for the Alliance project. Warning: I tried my hand with pre-Mending duels and as such I went closer to body horror than usual.

igneous crystals (2k words)

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Fun fight. Brutal, but most fights are, particularly Old-Walker fights, and you definitely keep up a blistering pace, which again, is apropos for an action scene like this. I'm inclined to dislike Raqsfawda just because of the sadism he seems to have, perhaps enjoying his work just a bit too much. But as you sort of hint at in your Alliance thread, the Alliance needed people like him to provide the firepower needed to be effective. I was also amused by some of the hinted backstory with Liark, such as her dragon mentor, just because my assumption (which could well be incorrect) is that Liark was created just for this story. But of course I love little touches like that that come up in writing.

Out of curiosity, I'm curious about your process when you write fight scenes like this that are based so heavily on cards. Do you gather the cards first and put together the fight scene based on them, or do you conceive the fight scene first and then find cards that fit? I'm just curious as to your process.

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Fun fight. Brutal, but most fights are, particularly Old-Walker fights, and you definitely keep up a blistering pace, which again, is apropos for an action scene like this.

You think the pace holds together? Great! I was worried it may have weak beats here and there or that the fight may have been too uniformly high-paced for its size. And yeah, when I set eyes on Blinding Light (which I had forgot to add, lol) I went "sure, it's probably intended to be temporal blindness, but why don't we get freaky with it? Didn't I just read that Efreet were often described as winged beings?"

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I'm inclined to dislike Raqsfawda just because of the sadism he seems to have, perhaps enjoying his work just a bit too much. But as you sort of hint at in your Alliance thread, the Alliance needed people like him to provide the firepower needed to be effective.

Him? Firepower? Why would you think so? :D (and don't think I missed the earlier "blistering")

Yes, your assumption about his role is absolutely correct, although he's more principled and playful than this battle paints him. He does enjoy fighting as an aspect of chaos (his name means more or less Chaos-dancer), but he'd be just as at home in a satyr revel. He's one of the ideologues of the Alliance, in fact, who abhors the Master's plan of a perfectly ordained Dominia and thinks such foolish initiatives should be crushed with prejudice in the name of freedom, but he still brought some levity to the more tense meetings. He definitely has a darker side, but I quite like him. Like, imagine knowing Sharaka only by her fight with Kahr :V

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I was also amused by some of the hinted backstory with Liark, such as her dragon mentor, just because my assumption (which could well be incorrect) is that Liark was created just for this story. But of course I love little touches like that that come up in writing.

Oh, you impression is spot on! Her initial name was Nameless Crystal Knight :D I kept adding character to her naturally as I wrote, periodically coming back to uniform the new facets of her character I came up with. Btw I don't know what's with me and :w: mages casting through prayers while nobody else uses verbal components for spells, Xant did the same vs Amaruo.

...well, Jack doesn't, but he's more of an :w:-splashing artificer than a :w: mage.

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Out of curiosity, I'm curious about your process when you write fight scenes like this that are based so heavily on cards. Do you gather the cards first and put together the fight scene based on them, or do you conceive the fight scene first and then find cards that fit?

It's a bit of a back and forth, to be honest. I'll try to explain with a few examples.

If I don't know a character's library very well (as with both fighters, in this case) I make wide searches with significant keywords before I start to see if there's some cards that inspire me (Liark's words were Crystal, Diamond and Pearl, which yielded the pearl mcguffin, the crystalline giant and the pearl dragon, then a more generic Light at some point*, while in Raqsfawda's case I went in mostly "blind", not bothering to look for chaos magic farther than Chaos Warp) in addition to personal all-time favorites (like Shunt, a great card from my beloved Mirrodin that Barinellos reminded me of a few years ago, Sunlance, Cloushift...).

*Liark comes from Elia/Eliana, a light-related name that might sound familiar, and -ark to add some power to both meaning and sound. The pearl dragon's name came from a (Ancient?) Greek translation of "white" that you hadn't already used for a plane, damn you :D

Then I sketch up a few cool moments I want to put in (like Liark stabbing Raqsfawda before the fight even begins, and him regenerating in a phoenix-like style) and figure out what cards would work for that beat (while I disliked facing the card in Arena, the idea of an electrical phoenix is awesome so here they go).

Often cards offer interesting angles that I can play to in other spots (a phoenix that doesn't come back to life at least once is weird, so I searched for cheap :r: cantrips for a later beat that would cement the trickster side of the efreet in the first half of the fight, and once I spotted Manamorphose and the Crimson Wisps I remembered the wisps cycle and thought that some off-color silliness would work well) or ways to enrich otherwise shallow aspects of the piece (how would a human knight encounter a pearl dragon? What would allow her to have honest-to-goodness Battle Mastery (and double attack)? Maybe her swordmanship focus is why she doesn't shapechange all that much during the fight?)

Not all cards generate that kind of feedback, though: the Landbind Ritual was just a way to add flavor to the beat "Liark heals herself with a sorcery", and cards like Disenchant, Luminous Bonds and Lightning Surge made me tweak half a sentence at best and at worst they're just a flimsy excuse to say "yeah, he can walk on walls now". (Agility) Still, I think that looking for them brings me farther from the barebone concept of the character I might have had and more into a realistic scenario where mages pick up spells for backstory and thematic reasons instead of straight optimization.

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The pearl dragon's name came from a (Ancient?) Greek translation of "white" that you hadn't already used for a plane, damn you :D

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This is an alternative continuation of this meeting between Daneera and Sharaka.

Warning: this is gonna be dark. As gruesome as most of my fights in this thread, and even bleaker for reasons that will be immediately apparent.

to the bitter end (about 2.6k)

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