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Does Song take to the Skies?
Yea 80%  80%  [ 4 ]
Nay 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
Not As Is 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
Abstain 20%  20%  [ 1 ]
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 Post subject: [Vote][Story] Skysong
PostPosted: Sat Feb 18, 2017 10:15 pm 
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...and within three years it was weaponized, and hundreds of thousands died...

Sorry.

Anyway, I like this piece, and as others have mentioned, there is a ton of great imagery here, and that nice, almost cinematic moment at the end when she bursts through the clouds.

There are a number of typos, which I did not jot down. I remember one where Song was stronger than "he" looked, and there was at least one instance of a quotation mark ending a paragraph in which there was no dialog. Also, this line I did copy: "and Song was sure the city's air wasn't doing him any fathers."

But typos aside, this was a good read. Yea from me.


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I'll mainly defer to my comments on the original thread, but, suffice to say, I'm a fan, and this is a "yea" from me!

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