Two issues:
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Their flight was blind, and in the panic Aria nearly stumbled once or twice, but the vise-like grip she and Illarion held on each other's wrists ensured they both stayed moving.
“It's blind with rage!” Illarion shouted, “I heard they get that way but I never thought I'd see it!”
The repeat of "blind" here is awkward.
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In the late afternoonm
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Despite her proclivities, perhaps meeting a few other Planeswalkers wouldn't be so bad. As long as she was careful, and what could go wrong at a wedding with such a group in attendance?
I felt the color drain from my face at that. I don't know whether to congratulate you or warn you.
Overall, I agree with your assessment that Day Trip is short and harmless, at least insofar as it doesn't need any major edits or contain any problem areas -- whether it will prove harmless to Aria and Illarion remains to be seen.
Yea from I.
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