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 Post subject: [Voting] Shadows
PostPosted: Wed Oct 07, 2015 1:46 am 
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I'm kind of awful about putting stuff off, aren't I?

Well, here we are, after a LONG ass downtime, I'm putting Shadows up to vote. I'm going ahead and posting this fairly early for the next week since this one is a long one and in general, some of you might be reading it for the first time.

I will say, to those who have read it, that I've gone through and made some subtle changes here and there to try and make everything flow together better, since I know there was some concerns when it was originally posted. They aren't major, but it's mostly a syntax clean up.

Anyways, here it is:
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 Post subject: Re: [Voting] Shadows
PostPosted: Wed Oct 07, 2015 3:59 am 
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 Post subject: Re: [Voting] Shadows
PostPosted: Mon Oct 12, 2015 11:59 pm 
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In looking up my comment in the original thread (which was over a year ago now), I say that it's not my cup of tea, but I only only remember the broadest strokes of what happens in the story. I need to give it a re-read in order to get wiki information anyway, so I might be able to read it this week and reassess my opinion.

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 Post subject: Re: [Voting] Shadows
PostPosted: Tue Oct 13, 2015 3:51 pm 
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(which was over a year ago now)

Yeah, I'm... not great about that kind of thing.
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I say that it's not my cup of tea, but I only only remember the broadest strokes of what happens in the story. I need to give it a re-read in order to get wiki information anyway, so I might be able to read it this week and reassess my opinion.

Even if you don't change your mind, that's okay.

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 Post subject: Re: [Voting] Shadows
PostPosted: Wed Oct 14, 2015 8:31 pm 
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Don't know if I'll even be reading all of this before the week's up, so I want to post this now:

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Zhiran’s billowing azure robes flared as he strode out of the massive dome of the infinite orrery trailing the aven in his wake.

You just a few sentences prior you name the Artificer's Quarter as a proper place within the Academy, so I'm not sure if this is supposed to be the Infinite Orrery or whether you're just going with colorful language.


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 Post subject: Re: [Voting] Shadows
PostPosted: Wed Oct 14, 2015 9:07 pm 
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Don't know if I'll even be reading all of this before the week's up, so I want to post this now:

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Zhiran’s billowing azure robes flared as he strode out of the massive dome of the infinite orrery trailing the aven in his wake.

You just a few sentences prior you name the Artificer's Quarter as a proper place within the Academy, so I'm not sure if this is supposed to be the Infinite Orrery or whether you're just going with colorful language.

Either or.

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 Post subject: Re: [Voting] Shadows
PostPosted: Thu Oct 15, 2015 8:45 pm 
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What an intriguing opening paragraph!


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 Post subject: Re: [Voting] Shadows
PostPosted: Sat Oct 17, 2015 9:57 pm 
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I remember this one!

I was a fan when I first read it, and I'm still a fan now. I'll mainly defer to my comments on the original thread, but this gets a "yea" from me!

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 Post subject: Re: [Voting] Shadows
PostPosted: Sat Oct 17, 2015 11:48 pm 
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Yeah, I really like this story. It's very different from the other Zhiran stories, but I think that's a good thing, to get some variety and not lock the character into the same sort of style that "Loss" and "Remembrances" use.

Definite "Yea" from me.


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 Post subject: Re: [Voting] Shadows
PostPosted: Thu Nov 05, 2015 4:30 pm 
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Wow I really enjoyed the bit about the prisoners bathed in torture in rishimaa dugeon.


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 Post subject: Re: [Voting] Shadows
PostPosted: Wed Nov 11, 2015 9:13 pm 
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Well done.

Yea

Bravo!


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