I... might regret this, but hell, you only live once. This is going to be difficult, no matter how I slice it.
"I"
The sun's warmth bathe the oceans of our life, my people stretching across the vast space of our world. I could feel it even here, the light of the moon far above a brightness at odds with such a sensation, but through our body, we feel it all the same. I am one, but we are all. We are connected, and yet I am myself. It is as it has always been, and we are happy.
But there is something wrong. I know this for we know this, but I do not know what. Panic stirs our body, and confusion stirs within I. It stirs within all of us, but few know what it is. Our people try to flee, but we are all. I, like all else, try to flee, but there is nowhere to go.
There is something very wrong.
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I awake.
There is something very wrong. I do not feel us. I do not feel hardly anything at all. The world is hard beneath me, a strange softness against my core. It is all that is here and I do not understand. It is cold, but the light still shines, but darkness is above as well. I feel mana within me and all around, and I call to it. My body begins to grow and the softness on me withers at its touch. I feel life in it, and it flows into me. I understand it now, and I change myself. I become and begin to understand.
But it is not as I am and I am alone. I do not understand.
And I am scared.
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The life is under me. It is all around me, but it is not me. I have come to understand though. My body stretches upwards, sprouting from my core, and the top blooms, reaching for the light far above. The light's soft touch causes a change within my new body, and I feel strength inside. My body grows around my core, shielding that which is I. This place is... alien. There are none like me for as far as the light reaches, and I can feel the sounds around me now, tiny shivers along my body. There is so much different than I. I think of my kin, in our great sea of one and I feel terrible loneliness inside. But there is something else.
I feel a surface that I cannot name. It is like the skin of the sea at home, but in a direction that does not exist. My body reaches out for it and I am suddenly nowhere.
There is no light in this new place, and my body is torn from me, but my core is safe. It is like swimming, this new place, and in the distance that I cannot name, there are things out there. Perhaps one of them is my world.
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I do not find my world. I am someplace new. It is different from the place that I was before, hard and cold upon my core, but I am stronger now. I remember that which I found on the place that was before, and my core thrums with mana. My body reforms and I find that shape once more, a blossom reaching for the soft light above.
Something stirs on the edge of my sight and I stop. It approaches and I have no way to describe it. It is different than me. It is different from even that which I have come to understand. It approaches and nudges me. I do not know how to respond.
It hurts me! It opened and has tried to engulf me. It seeks to join me, but there is pain! I do the only thing I can think of, and seek to join with it. It feels pain as well, and guilt goes through me, but it is too late now. I have begun to understand it and know that it cannot live with what I have done. But I must understand and mana surges through my core, more of my body consuming that which I have joined.
It is... complex. There are no ways I can describe, and suddenly that which I understood before seems simple by comparison. I surge forth, my body consuming the thing that is no longer alive. I do as before and try to recreate that which I have consumed, understanding coming from it. I do not succeed as well as before, but I am alive with understanding I cannot describe. My body's shape is new and I do something that I know is moving, but in a way I have never before. My body holds me up, extremities forming beneath me. They are rudimentary to the beautiful complexity of the thing I consumed, but they give me a precious gift.
I can move now. My core pulses happily with this experience, but in the depths of my core I am still scared. I must know more. I must understand.
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Many months later...
I walk amongst them and they stare. I know that I do not look like them, not well enough to fit in, and they recoil from me. I do not blame them. I feel the biting loneliness deep inside myself as well. I would love nothing more than to return home, but I am too different now. The things I have come to understand would scare my people, and now I fear I shall be alone forever.
I do not look like them, but I have begun to understand them better. It has been many worlds and I still do not know enough. I feel guilt that I took the life of as many of them as I have, but I needed to know. I still need to know, but I have discovered something about them. They can exchange knowledge using sound. It is... inaccurate and once more I am overcome with the desire to return home, to share myself with those who are like me. But I am too different now.
The stones all around me are carved with letters, but I do not yet know how to read them. I hope to learn to speak soon, but I must consume more still. There are intricacies within their bodies that I have not yet mastered, but I must no longer take life to understand. They keep their dead and though they decompose as our kind do, it is different. They do not have cores for one.
Amusement runs through me at that, but it is morbid and even I realize that. It must be the graveyard through which I move. I had watched them earlier as they buried the newly dead and I plan to consume it tonight. The pale moonlight is high in the sky and I crane my head above, though I do not need to. It helps me fit in, and though they are not like me, I find I want their company all the same. I want to know what they know. I simply do not wish to be alone, even if I will likely never be as one with them as I could my own people.
The stone near my goal is covered in moss and I consume that, strength pulsing inside once more. The earth beneath my feet is freshly turned and I know that I must have arrived. I do not know why they bury their dead, but to consume, I must first reach it. My body loses shape and I glory in the freedom of at last knowing no form. My body spirals quickly and I dive into the earth, throwing it away as I seep deeper and deeper. My core passes beneath the ground and I can feel my goal beneath, consuming the wood underneath my touch and I break through, filling the box they have placed their dead within. I understand the form well enough, but I must learn of what their chest contains to form the words. It takes quite some time and I am careful as I consume the dead. Finally, only the bones remain and I return to the surface, swimming through the earth until I once more sprout like the flowers that I first understood all those months ago.
It takes some time, and I do bother with the surface details. Excitement runs through my core, the only part of me that seems to survive my travels between the worlds. I have already come to understand that I am unique, even amongst these beings which are different from myself. I am not like my people any longer and I am not like these beings which I seek to understand. My core pulses, and I focus on the task at hand, forming the space inside my throat which will allow me to speak.
The space inside my body swells and I exhale, sound rippling through my body, an unfamiliar sensation that tickles. I can think of only one thing to say.
"I."
The joy that runs through me makes me lose focus, and the complex space within collapses. I let it, knowing I can make it again should I need to. I understand it now. One step closer to understanding what I have become and where I belong. One step closer to connecting again at last.
I choose a new form, something less conspicuous than the body I came in with. Four legs, a tail, the head around my core. It is a beast they call a wolf and sudden inspiration makes me attempt to create the space within. I make the sound I believe the animal should and that strange sound echoes through my body once more. Joy pulses within my core again, but it is a deeper satisfaction and I stalk from the graveyard. There is much more to understand, but it will come in time, and then perhaps I can find something to connect to at last.
So yeah. There you go. I give you an Ooze planeswalker, complete with the freaking alien perspective.
Below is an explanation of how it functions and thinks.
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To begin with, the world that it comes from is covered in one massive ooze sea. Within, the individuals float, the cores literally defining their self. Their bodies are the ooze, but the core is like their mind and heart all in one fist sized pearl. Since that is the singularity of their being, when I planeswalks, the core is the only thing that goes. The body is more an artificial extension created to interact with the world around them and connect to others. It is like a billion tiny individual cells being guided by a central intelligence, but since they are created as needed, they are like a biological tool, not part of the 'self' that maintains as I walks.
The way that I's mind worked up until that point is a shared consciousness with no barriers, but a clear sense of self. Like Instrumentality without the loss of self. All the body on I's homeworld is essentially the same body, with all these minds floating within. Knowledge and understanding are transmitted within this body, so they can understand each other without words.
Their perception is both photoreactive and tactile, and they understand sound as vibrations. You can see, I hope, how such an alien perspective would lead to a completely unique way to understand things. The first thing that I did was to consume a flower, and once it had assimilated the body, it understood it and could recreate it. However, the more complex a thing is, the more I needs sample data of, which means that it consumes and converts it into something that it can recreate. This is a prime example of classic grokking, but naturally that phrase hasn't caught on well enough to use.
Even feeling guilt over having ended lives, I'm not sure I really understands other beings yet, but it knows enough to know to avoid conflict and consuming individuals tends to cause problems.
If you're wondering what I looks like in human shape, since I left a lot of details out since it is in first person, imagine Experiment One and Ooze Flux, but without the internal organs being a different color. There are also elements of changelings too, such as Game-Trail Changeling, Woodland Changeling, and Amoeboid Changeling in the less defined moments (though without the eyes all over) The only part of it that really stands out is the core, which generally sits within its head.
The final thing to say is that even though I identifies itself as "I", chances are someone else listening to it would mistake it for "eye" or "aye". Possibly even "Igh" or "Ie". Sort of... going to crowdsource that for you guys to decide.
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I'm really, really into this. The tactility in particular is interesting for me because I'm working on a story involving a character that would be very tactile but is afflicted with a condition that dulls their sense of touch... it just makes for an interesting coincidental contrast. This was a bit of a puzzle to work out but always an engaging puzzle.
It's a little hard to get a sense of where one would go with this character, but I kind of like that challenge. It's another character, like several of the more recent additions to our roster, that has sort of an odd place and really pushes the boundaries of what we can do with Magic fiction specifically and fantasy in general maybe.
Ooze World sounds awesome, and it reminds me of something that comes up in The Long Earth, which I highly recommend reading to anyone that hasn't heard of it...
Yeah, this was cool. Very well done with a challenging criteria you gave yourself. I really enjoyed the progression of awareness that "I" has through this piece as it consumes more and more things. Morbidly, I sort of want it to consume a god at some point...
I still think we'll have to have Thuzez meet up with "I" at some point...
I... might regret this, but hell, you only live once.
Unless you have boneitis, you have nothing to regret.
Funny how you never realize that your life is missing an ooze planeswalker until you read about one. Then you can't understand how you ever lived without it.
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This is a really cool planeswalker. You actually did a serious take on the "ooze goes around eating everything" idea, which tickles me to no end.
If you're looking for suggestions for its name, I think Ai is the nicest rendition. It means "love" in various Asian languages.
Glad that you dig it. I've been struggling with this idea for weeks now, so seeing a positive reaction helps. As to Ai, it's a decent suggestion. It's still a little early for me to make any decision, but it's a decent possibility.
I'm really, really into this. It's a little hard to get a sense of where one would go with this character, but I kind of like that challenge. It's another character, like several of the more recent additions to our roster, that has sort of an odd place and really pushes the boundaries of what we can do with Magic fiction specifically and fantasy in general maybe.
Ooze World sounds awesome, and it reminds me of something that comes up in The Long Earth, which I highly recommend reading to anyone that hasn't heard of it...
Well, one of the big reasons I decided to do this was the fact that we had a definite deficit of green walkers, and I wanted to see if I could hit a note that could be simultaneously sympathetic and possibly villainous. I mean, the alien perspective is one of the more useful features for the character. Plus, the idea that it consumes to learn is amusing to me.
Another thing that I like about this ascension is that the emotions were second hand. We... don't actually know what happened, and I feel like that kind of mystery has a lot of potential.
Yeah, this was cool. Very well done with a challenging criteria you gave yourself. I really enjoyed the progression of awareness that "I" has through this piece as it consumes more and more things. Morbidly, I sort of want it to consume a god at some point...
I still think we'll have to have Thuzez meet up with "I" at some point...
I don't have any clue how that sort of thing would happen, but I won't lie that I like the idea that afterwards all this glittery star stuff would be suspended in its goo.
And if you want to write that encounter, I won't stand in your way!
Funny how you never realize that your life is missing an ooze planeswalker until you read about one. Then you can't understand how you ever lived without it.
Yes, embrace his gooey love. .... that came out wrong.
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So, I'm looking over this once more, and I have to admit that I'm a bit conflicted about I's sense of self and the use of pronouns like "me" mostly because... well, I don't know if the way the ooze minds work would really account for reflexive pronouns. It's very similar in concept to the thoughtweft or soulsong, and since that's the case, the self of sense would indicate oneself without words.
It's something of a conundrum...
Also, since Aaarrrgh brought up Ellia, I'm sure she'd be fascinated with I.
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Alright, time to go on my weekly posting spree! We'll start with the ooze.
I like it, simply because of how kooky it is. The story is engaging, if a little difficult to follow. That's probably to be expected, however.
My main concern is whether or not Oozes can be planeswalkers in the first place.
Granted, this appears to hit all the criteria - except that of actually being "born". I may need additional clarification, but from what I've read, "I" appears to have sprung fully formed (or perhaps divided) from the giant primordial soup that is I's homeplane. Now, I'm no expert, and since Barinellos made the character I'm willing to trust him. Rather than doing so blindly, however, it would probably be beneficial to actually discuss whether or not this is possible, rather than taking it at face value.
Mainly what comes to mind is that this ooze planeswalker seems more primal and elemental than most of what we usually consider for planeswalkerhood. There are exceptions, of course, and really, I'm all for expanding the list of what can and can't be a planeswalker - it's just that with our normally strict adherence to the nature of the multiverse, we should be looking at this sort of stuff more critically than we have been.
That all being said, this sort of alien mindset is the sort of thing the EM could benefit from, I'm just not certain if it falls within the constraints we've set up for ourselves. I, for one, do not believe that (at the beginning of this story) "I" has enough sense of self in order to develop the spark. I also don't think there was any sort of explanation as to why the spark ignited in the first place. Usually the ignition is triggered by some profound event or trauma, and as far as I could tell, "I" was just chilling in the primordial soup of his home plane, then stuff happened, and he wasn't there any more.
Anyway, the story was engaging and the character is definitely interesting. But we should probably talk about the metaphysics of this process before this goes up for vote or anything like that.
Granted, this appears to hit all the criteria - except that of actually being "born". I may need additional clarification, but from what I've read, "I" appears to have sprung fully formed (or perhaps divided) from the giant primordial soup that is I's homeplane. Now, I'm no expert, and since Barinellos made the character I'm willing to trust him. Rather than doing so blindly, however, it would probably be beneficial to actually discuss whether or not this is possible, rather than taking it at face value.
That would be where the core of the character comes in. Literally, the pearl that makes up I's actual body. It did divide from a parent, but it had all the stages of development as it grew. The soup isn't actually I, but more like... an organic tool? That which we would identify as the ooze isn't I.
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Mainly what comes to mind is that this ooze planeswalker seems more primal and elemental than most of what we usually consider for planeswalkerhood. There are exceptions, of course, and really, I'm all for expanding the list of what can and can't be a planeswalker - it's just that with our normally strict adherence to the nature of the multiverse, we should be looking at this sort of stuff more critically than we have been.
The oozes of I's homeworld are certainly not your average oozes. They have a society, if albeit one that is very strange to us.
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I, for one, do not believe that (at the beginning of this story) "I" has enough sense of self in order to develop the spark. I also don't think there was any sort of explanation as to why the spark ignited in the first place. Usually the ignition is triggered by some profound event or trauma, and as far as I could tell, "I" was just chilling in the primordial soup of his home plane, then stuff happened, and he wasn't there any more.
One does not develop a spark. I mean, I know you know that, but I felt I just had to state it. But yes, I has a sense of self and individuality, but the entire world is networked. I is just one node in that intelligence, but it is distinct from its parents or neighbors. They share sensation and thoughts, but it's just a more fluid way of communication. To draw a comparison and rebuttal, it would be like saying that just because we could talk to each other, we lose our sense of self. As to its spark ignition, that was actually very much on purpose. It's second hand panic (great band name) that triggered the spark. Like if a cow was caught in a stampede, but didn't know why they were running, just that the emotions of everything around them was significant enough to trigger your own panic.
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Anyway, the story was engaging and the character is definitely interesting. But we should probably talk about the metaphysics of this process before this goes up for vote or anything like that.
Hopefully I've answered all required.
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For the record, I didn't understand that it was second hand panic that caused Ei to ascend. I just assumed we didn't see whatever happened... happen, but that it happened to Ei directly.
So what I'm getting from this is that calling Ei an ooze proper might be something of a misnomer? The ooze part of Ei is more like a biological prosthesis generated by the core, which isn't the same biological entity as an ooze on another plane might be? (Not saying we should stop calling Ei an ooze, just sussing out the details of Ei's biology for myself a bit.)
For the record, I didn't understand that it was second hand panic that caused Ei to ascend. I just assumed we didn't see whatever happened... happen, but that it happened to Ei directly.
Well, it really happened to pretty much EVERYTHING on the world.
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So what I'm getting from this is that calling Ei an ooze proper might be something of a misnomer? The ooze part of Ei is more like a biological prosthesis generated by the core, which isn't the same biological entity as an ooze on another plane might be? (Not saying we should stop calling Ei an ooze, just sussing out the details of Ei's biology for myself a bit.)
Well, the ooze part is essentially mindless without the core's guiding impulses, so the ooze part is a lot like the oozes of other planes. Which raises the question of what would happen if you dumped Ei into another ooze's body. but really, yeah, there's a separation of Ei's identity from its "body".
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So, what is Aye's core like? Is it solid? Is it a goo of a slightly different density? Or is it physically indistinguishable from the ooze he creates?
It's like a fist sized pearl. Haven't decided on the color yet though...
For full disclosure too, Aye generates ooze by use of mana, while the core itself requires actual matter to grow larger. Core growth though is a very very slow process.
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You know, I'm tempted to have I make a trip to Theros solely so he can have a glittery ooze star body....
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This piece really starts out beautifully!
I enjoy how the imagery was all, and then slowly balanced with plot to morph from fairly abstract, to a clear story. It really feels like incubation/growth/maturation.
It makes for an interesting and exciting read to witness I's plight.
Huh, I've never thought of an Ooze Walker, sounds interesting. Only thing currently I have to bring up is what relation I(t) might have with other oozes, and about his home plane/entity: A) if it's all Ooze, just that imply that all the mana on that plane is already in living form? B) Is the Slimey Plane segmented by colored Ooze? Aka is I(t) made from the plane's goobody as a Ooze from a multicolor planar ooze? C) is the world ooze an ooze in any relayed way to the source of other oozes? Ex: Is it made from things the way Bloodhall Ooze or Necroplasm are implied to be? or is this Progenitooze a pure ooze in a way no other ooze can be? I'm aware we're focusing on the character, but since its plane of origin is very particular, I figured the plane should be questioned a little.
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I know that I'm late to the party and I don't vote anymore, but I want to express my happiness with this bizarre person/thing. You did a great job conveying the alien perceptions and personality. It reminds me of both the Changelings in Star Trek and the changelings on Lorwyn.
I share Planechaser's questions, however. I want to know more! Is it proper to call I's species "ooze"? What should we refer to its world as?
Regarding planeswalker colors and deficits thereof, when I add up all the ones with dossiers in the archives (except the private Molcru and Jarik) and those recently voted in (including I), plus Agmund Frijern, Cara Holis, Raef, the Duchess, and the Shifter, I get this [running] total: : 17 primary, 1 splash : 16 primary, 2 splash : 13 primary, 1 splash : 11 primary, 1 splash : 10 primary, 2 splash human: ~21 nonhuman: 15 part-human or undead: ~4
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I feel sorry for I's loneliness, especially when it realizes that it can't really return home because it has changed too much and would frighten its people. When I first started reading I worried that it would be too similar to Mari Gwynn, but it's really a very, very different character from anyone else.
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