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PostPosted: Thu Aug 14, 2014 9:58 pm 
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So, I threw this together today as a combination of a number of suggestions, requests, and just experiments that I have received and/or wanted to try. Essentially, this is an experiment in alternate endings. I've told a few people of a creative writing class I took in college wherein I wrote a story that was set up to have multiple endings. My plan was to write ten different ends, keeping everything the same except the last page, which I would give a different one to each person in class without telling them anything was different. I did not end up doing it, but I've always liked the premise.

So today, I wrote a story. This is also in response to something Lord Luna said a while ago about someone creating a "cute" story. So, for my experiment, I have written a cute story about an adorable little girl. Now, in this story, near the end, a door opens, and someone enters. At that point, You the Reader gets to choose who that someone is! (Out of five choices, so far.)

This is not and never will be canon!

I should be upfront about the fact that I have stolen four different people's M:EM characters without asking them. I feel pretty proud bad about that, but as I said, this is just an experiment, and is not canon, as emphatically stated above. That being said, if you don't like my use of your character, I apologize, and I will gladly remove it if you want me to.

Anyway, please enjoy my cute story with five alternate endings of your choice! (And, because of the nature of this forum, probably your character!)

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PostPosted: Fri Aug 15, 2014 3:01 am 
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I thought the story preamble was way too long, but the concept is neat.

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Weeiiirrrd.

I'd like to plead guilty, and throw myself on the mercy of the court.

I thought the story preamble was way too long, but the concept is neat.

Yeah, if this were something I really wanted to push, I'd probably pare it down a bit. But basically I just wanted to describe the world in detail before the endings.

Thanks for reading!


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 Post subject: Re: Imagine a Room
PostPosted: Fri Aug 15, 2014 4:30 pm 
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Ha...

You won't make me feel sympathy for Raiker Venn that easily, Raven!

Not even... Not even a little bit!

*sniff*

I actually started from the bottom up, and I was all like "It's sort of weird that Clade's is the happiest so far".

And then I got to the absolutely tooth-rotting, candy-coated, sugary fluff that was Erik and had to go brush my teeth. Hmm, actually... Are you some sort of impostor???? I'm not sure you would be capable of writing something to innocent.

...I've got my eye on you. :takei:

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I started with the Kirsh ending, thinking "Oh, he's the nicest out of the characters I recognize."

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Originally, I was only going to include two, Kirsh and Raiker, in that order. My assumption was that people would think to themselves, Self, Raiker's ending is going to be horrible and disturbing. Let's read Kirsh's. Thus the sort of inversion of those two. But then I thought Clade would be perfect for this, and then Ellia seemed great. I added Erik because I did want one "good" ending, and he was about the only one I could think of.

Also, I encourage others to feel free to write endings for this with other characters, if you wish. It's a fun little exercise in meaning shifts.


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I'm sorry that it took me a while to get to this, Raven. But I'm glad I did - it's really, really wonderful. I think it's great to see these sorts of things which just play with the characters, and it has the typical Raven quality to it as well.

More and more, I like the idea of having a non-canon subsection of the Archive for pieces like this.

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I loved this, and it serves as a good introduction to each character, which is useful for people who are bad at keeping up with reading stuff (that would be me, by the way). Also, I think you really captured Erik, which reminds me of the fact that I need to finish the story I started working on months ago...

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I'm sorry that it took me a while to get to this, Raven. But I'm glad I did - it's really, really wonderful. I think it's great to see these sorts of things which just play with the characters, and it has the typical Raven quality to it as well.

More and more, I like the idea of having a non-canon subsection of the Archive for pieces like this.

Glad you enjoyed it! I had fun writing it. Although, I will admit the cutesy stuff created a strange sort of expectation loop in my brain. It's like, okay, people are going to assume there's something sinister here. But there IS something sinister here. But I don't want there to be anything sinister here, at least in the first section. But people are going to assume it, because it's me...

It got a lot more surreal than I just explained it...

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I loved this, and it serves as a good introduction to each character, which is useful for people who are bad at keeping up with reading stuff (that would be me, by the way). Also, I think you really captured Erik, which reminds me of the fact that I need to finish the story I started working on months ago...

Thanks, Aaarrrgh! Glad you liked it! Erik and his daughter seemed perfect for the, I guess we'll call it the "good ending." He helps counter-balance the other ones pretty well, I think.


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It took me a bit to remember who Erik was and then I want awwwww.

You really did capture each character well. Clade's bizarre gentleness as he wrecks everything... Kirsh's ethical doubts and desire to heal even perhaps beyond his own ability... Ellia's casual abusive cruelty and bitterness... Erik's simple goodness... and Raiker's totally twisted petulance here warped into something almost noble.

I feel like maybe with some of the established characters we could make room in the archives for shorter character pieces that just show interactions like this, albeit in a more canonical context... There's something really engaging about short character stuff.


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 Post subject: Re: Imagine a Room
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It took me a bit to remember who Erik was and then I want awwwww.

You really did capture each character well. Clade's bizarre gentleness as he wrecks everything... Kirsh's ethical doubts and desire to heal even perhaps beyond his own ability... Ellia's casual abusive cruelty and bitterness... Erik's simple goodness... and Raiker's totally twisted petulance here warped into something almost noble.

I feel like maybe with some of the established characters we could make room in the archives for shorter character pieces that just show interactions like this, albeit in a more canonical context... There's something really engaging about short character stuff.

Glad you enjoyed it! I was really proud of the fact that Ellia's segment is about half as long as the others, like she couldn't be bothered for even that short space of time.

I was pretty happy with Clade's section, although it feels a little odd he would come to the door rather than just smash through.

Kirsh's section is probably my favorite. Although it's usually bad storytelling, I do have a soft-spot for the "And it was all a psychotic delusion" endings...

I love Raiker's ending, but I don't feel I captured the surreal, horrific world outside nearly as well as I imagine it. :shudder:


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 Post subject: Re: Imagine a Room
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I won't lie: On my first read-through, I thought the room in Raiker's ending was a room-sized artificial demi-plane in the Blind Eternities. I got that it was on a more regular eldritch hellscape the second time through.

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I won't lie: On my first read-through, I thought the room in Raiker's ending was a room-sized artificial demi-plane in the Blind Eternities. I got that it was on a more regular eldritch hellscape the second time through.

Funnily, I had considered just that at one point. Maybe it would have been better? I don't know.

Also, I love the thought that there is such a thing as a "regular eldritch hellscape". Someone needs to work both that line and the underlying concept into a story somewhere...


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I got that at first too before realizing that it was meant to be a plane full of chaos with one nice room.

If any setting can accommodate a "regular eldritch landscape" surely it's Dominia :P


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I got that at first too before realizing that it was meant to be a plane full of chaos with one nice room.

If any setting can accommodate a "regular eldritch landscape" surely it's Dominia :P

I'm imagining a situation with two 'walkers, one new and one old.

New 'Walker: By the gods! What IS this place?!?
Old 'Walker: Oh, this old place? There's no name for it. It's just a regular of eldritch hellscape.
New 'Walker: A regular eldritch hellscape?
Old 'Walker: Oh, yeah. Nothing special. Now, if you want to see a REAL eldritch hellscape, follow me!
New 'Walker: NO!!!


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Somehow I could see that from Illarion, despite him not being that awesome a 'walker, just because of his tourist behavior.

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Somehow I could see that from Illarion, despite him not being that awesome a 'walker, just because of his tourist behavior.

I can see it.

Illarion: Yeah, this is alright, but you haven't LIVED until you've see the blood moon-rise from this peak I know of. I just really hope it's not eldritch horror rutting season...


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 Post subject: Re: Imagine a Room
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Somehow I could see that from Illarion, despite him not being that awesome a 'walker, just because of his tourist behavior.

I can see it.

Illarion: Yeah, this is alright, but you haven't LIVED until you've see the blood moon-rise from this peak I know of. I just really hope it's not eldritch horror rutting season...

I read "blood moon-rise," and my brain retconned all the Generator prompts about "Illarion starts a band" to "Illarion starts a CCR cover band."

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Somehow I could see that from Illarion, despite him not being that awesome a 'walker, just because of his tourist behavior.

I can see it.

Illarion: Yeah, this is alright, but you haven't LIVED until you've see the blood moon-rise from this peak I know of. I just really hope it's not eldritch horror rutting season...

I read "blood moon-rise," and my brain retconned all the Generator prompts about "Illarion starts a band" to "Illarion starts a CCR cover band."

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