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To go ahead and get Alessa into the archives.
I would put Untitled up for vote too but... I mislike not having a title.
Of the two though, I feel like Untitled is the stronger piece, but this was her debut, so it gets first shot.

I liked this when you posted it and I still do. It serves as an effective character introduction, and your action scenes are a blast to read and fascinating mechanically. This gets a solid yea from me.

We need more timey-wimey stuff, so this gets a yea from me on that arbitrary premise.

That, and you know, it's a good story and Alessa is a compelling character. But that's whatever, I guess.

I'll just refer to my comments on the original thread, and summarize here with a "yea."

I, as well, have said what I have to say on this piece. It belongs in the archives, all things considered.

I just injected my reactions into the original thread just to make sure you got them and I thought it was more fitting to put it there.