Found here.

If accepted, this will be public

Typo:

Should be "meet Ygraine".

This line:

I don't know what you mean by "and have you".

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There are times you capitalize "the River Neth" and other times you leave it "the river Neth", so I'm not sure which it's supposed to be.

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Honestly, I was expecting this piece to be longer, though unlike others I didn't feel like it was all that short. I kept having to stop to record names, though, so that might have contributed to it. I'm... honestly not sure what to make of it. I guess I like the opening battle bit on the dragon, and I guess I like the way you expand on Denner's home plane, but I can't say I really enjoyed it through reading. I just don't think I was able to really connect with what was happening. I'm not going to vote just yet so I can think on it a little while.

I'm voting "Yea" with the assumptions that the typos Luna noted will be taken care of. I like this story, and while much of it is stuff we already knew from the dossier, I prefer things in story-form where possible, so I like this better.

I'll mainly defer to my comments on the original thread, but this gets a "yea" from me.