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| Author: | Tevish Szat [ Sat Aug 12, 2017 9:21 pm ] |
| Post subject: | [Vote][Story] Across the Stars |
Found Here: viewtopic.php?f=19&t=18548 If Accepted, this work will be public This vote ONLY covers the actual story (first two posts). A separate vote will be held for the Planeswalker's guide at a later date (After its completion) |
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| Author: | Huey Nomure [ Mon Aug 14, 2017 3:24 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: [Vote][Story] Across the Stars |
Quite enjoyable, with nice details like Aria tailored clothes. I'd ask to correct that typo where the angels are called Sidera instead of Sidrea right at the ending, since at first I thought the angels were actually called Sidera and the world remembered their name wrong, and Aria calling them Sidrea again was weird, thus marring the flow of the story. (Selena misspells Ariva too, but that is understandable in-universe as it's a name she never heard before) There are also missing full stops and speech tags, but I get the feeling you don't care too much about those. Globally, Yea. |
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| Author: | OrcishLibrarian [ Sat Aug 19, 2017 9:15 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: [Vote][Story] Across the Stars |
I'll primarily defer to my comments on the original thread, but the executive summary is that I'm a fan, and it's a "yea" from me. |
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