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...and within three years it was weaponized, and hundreds of thousands died...

Sorry.

Anyway, I like this piece, and as others have mentioned, there is a ton of great imagery here, and that nice, almost cinematic moment at the end when she bursts through the clouds.

There are a number of typos, which I did not jot down. I remember one where Song was stronger than "he" looked, and there was at least one instance of a quotation mark ending a paragraph in which there was no dialog. Also, this line I did copy: "and Song was sure the city's air wasn't doing him any fathers."

But typos aside, this was a good read. Yea from me.

I'll mainly defer to my comments on the original thread, but, suffice to say, I'm a fan, and this is a "yea" from me!