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Shall we take Control of this situation?
Poll ended at Mon Aug 01, 2016 3:58 pm
Yea: 75%  75%  [ 3 ]
Nay: 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
Not As Is: 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
Abstain: 25%  25%  [ 1 ]
Total votes : 4
Total voters : 4
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 23, 2016 3:58 pm 
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Title: Control
Author: RavenoftheBlack
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Word Count: 6316

Required Reading


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PostPosted: Fri Jul 29, 2016 11:08 pm 
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The main criticism I have is that I don't think the action scenes, which comprise most of this story, flow very well, mostly because I know animal behavior and various actions taken by the animals in this story don't line up, falling into a bit of an uncanny valley for me. I'm willing to give it a pass, however, because I'm curious where this is going, and want to see what becomes of Daneera's quest for werewolf booty.

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The main criticism I have is that I don't think the action scenes, which comprise most of this story, flow very well, mostly because I know animal behavior and various actions taken by the animals in this story don't line up, falling into a bit of an uncanny valley for me. I'm willing to give it a pass, however, because I'm curious where this is going, and want to see what becomes of Daneera's quest for werewolf booty.

I can understand this. I mean, the fact that they're not acting like animals is sort of the point, and Daneera comments on it or thinks about it a couple of times, but still, I can definitely see where it could bother someone. If you're interested, there are two more stories in this story arc that have been posted, but not yet put up for vote (and seeing as we've only gotten two votes a piece on any of the three stories up for vote, I don't think I'll be putting any of my outstanding stories up for vote this coming week.)


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PostPosted: Sun Jul 31, 2016 1:19 pm 
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Daneera's quest for werewolf booty.

I mean, this shouldn't make me laugh... but it did.

:D

Anyway, as I tried to explain in my comments on the original thread, I'm a big, big fan of this story, and it gets a big "yea" from me!

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