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[Vote][Story] Cold Wind
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Author:  RavenoftheBlack [ Sat Aug 08, 2015 5:27 pm ]
Post subject:  [Vote][Story] Cold Wind

Title: Cold Wind
Author: RavenoftheBlack
Status: Public
Word Count: 3803

Cold Wind

Author:  Aaarrrgh [ Mon Aug 10, 2015 5:33 am ]
Post subject:  Re: [Vote][Story] Cold Wind

I really like this piece. It does a good job of establishing the setting, and Salkhi is a great character. There are some deep internal conflicts there, which is something I like.

My only critique is that it was sometimes hard to follow, simply because there are no formatting clues as to what is flashback and what is current action. But that's a minor issue, and I could almost always pick it up a sentence or two into each paragraph.

Voting Yea.

Author:  Barinellos [ Tue Aug 11, 2015 12:10 am ]
Post subject:  Re: [Vote][Story] Cold Wind

So, given my own role of editor to this, I think it obvious that it meets my approval. You did a good job at the transition sequences, which was tricky.

Author:  OrcishLibrarian [ Sun Aug 16, 2015 7:39 am ]
Post subject:  Re: [Vote][Story] Cold Wind

Trying to sneak my two cents in here before the deadline. I'll mainly defer to my comments on the original thread, but the short version is that I'm a fan. "Yea" from me.

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