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Is there a Cold Wind blowing?
Poll ended at Sun Aug 16, 2015 5:27 pm
A Pleasant Breeze (Yea): 86%  86%  [ 6 ]
The Cold Wind blows, alright... (Nay): 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
I could use a windbreaker (Not As Is): 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
I'm hunkering down for winter (Abstain): 14%  14%  [ 1 ]
Total votes : 7
Total voters : 7
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 Post subject: [Vote][Story] Cold Wind
PostPosted: Sat Aug 08, 2015 5:27 pm 
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Title: Cold Wind
Author: RavenoftheBlack
Status: Public
Word Count: 3803

Cold Wind


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PostPosted: Mon Aug 10, 2015 5:33 am 
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I really like this piece. It does a good job of establishing the setting, and Salkhi is a great character. There are some deep internal conflicts there, which is something I like.

My only critique is that it was sometimes hard to follow, simply because there are no formatting clues as to what is flashback and what is current action. But that's a minor issue, and I could almost always pick it up a sentence or two into each paragraph.

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PostPosted: Tue Aug 11, 2015 12:10 am 
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So, given my own role of editor to this, I think it obvious that it meets my approval. You did a good job at the transition sequences, which was tricky.

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PostPosted: Sun Aug 16, 2015 7:39 am 
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Trying to sneak my two cents in here before the deadline. I'll mainly defer to my comments on the original thread, but the short version is that I'm a fan. "Yea" from me.

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