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Typos:

Should be "and a larger one".


Should be "fingers".


Missing quotation marks and should end in a question mark.


Probably supposed to be "four Ulfr".

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I want to ask about this line:

Is it purposefully ending in a period, or did you mean for that to be a question mark? I can see it as either way.

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So, I actually quite liked this one. I felt it progressed rather nicely from mystery to horror (at least for Ivar), and I also really liked how it ended (after Ivar transformed back). I need to go back and check the Aralheim guide, because I don't recall mention of the belief of anything like Skoll and that is fascinating to me.

I've edited those typos, including the one you weren't sure on (which was a typo).

I like the story in general. I'm still not particularly fond of the Wolf section, but I thought the rest was quite good.

"Yea."

My goodness, you just killed it with the interaction between ivar and vivianne! it made my heart flutter, dude.

Interestingly, I butchered a deers front-quarters recently! I wasn't looking forward to it at all, but had to.

Rettrborg is such a gross name for a town...lol

lol at "...the creature could not be induced to go farther..."
-And the rest of the paragraph was even funnier! hahahah!

And the next stanza has even more hilarity!
I'd better stop before I die a'laughing.... seeing as how I have a propensity for imagining myself as the main character.

I believe that your plot-twists are an ingral part of the story-telling you do. What better way to say more, with less.

I liked the plot twist. You did well to incorporate it with continuity.

Oh... and the card idea is pretty sweet, too.

Yea.