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But does it fit?
Yea 25%  25%  [ 1 ]
Nay 25%  25%  [ 1 ]
Not As Is 25%  25%  [ 1 ]
Abstain 25%  25%  [ 1 ]
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I'll be honest, I both took far too much notice of Kylee's accent and could not actually hear the accent in my head. I don't know if it actually adds anything here.

On top of that, I'm not sure how much I actually like this from a point of view more removed. It seems too easy to poke holes in what happens in this story just the same as a stupid blockbuster movie. If Mishra was working on the machine, did Kylee not hear any of it? Why was he passing in front of her, to get tools or something? Wouldn't he capture her attention as he walked around? I just find it difficult to believe Kylee could be completely oblivious the entire time.


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As I mentioned in the original thread, there are things about this piece that do not fit my personal tastes, but it does illustrate Oisin's unique abilities, and highlight an important component of his personality, so I'll vote Yea on it.


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There IS a little problem in the position of the actors in this piece, as Luna points out; it may be easily explained, but I'd like to have that point clarified before I feel like giving my vote.

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Well, considering I do have qualms with the story, have actually read it, and haven't actually voted on it yet, I'm going to put a big ol' Peter New NOPE on it.

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I'm going for NaI... at least partly to have 1 vote in each category, but also because I think there's something about this that I'm just not able to put my finger on right now. I'm not staunchly opposed to the story, but I'm going to have to suss out exactly what's putting my off my biscuits about it, and until then, it wouldn't hurt to send it back to the drawing board.

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I'm going to call this Not Accepted for now. It's already been up for several weeks in a row and it does have 2-to-1 against, so it will be easier to say it was Not Accepted.


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