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The Planeswalker's Daughter
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Nay 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
Not As Is 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 28, 2014 1:17 am 
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There are some implied facts in this story

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Also, should this be edited to be explicitly Ellia? It was frankly, kinda awkward to never refer to her by name.

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 28, 2014 1:25 am 
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Also, should this be edited to be explicitly Ellia? It was frankly, kinda awkward to never refer to her by name.

Honestly, I think I would, since we've all basically settled on her being our connection between this Event and the established canon. However, if there's no easy way to do it, I don't think it's absolutely necessary.


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PostPosted: Sat Jun 28, 2014 12:57 pm 
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I actually liked that it was her but that it wasn't her name... there was something about that... I don't know, it just really worked for me. It distanced her a bit from her later form and I think that was useful for the impact of the piece.


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PostPosted: Sat Jun 28, 2014 10:15 pm 
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I think it's fine to just have that information as an addendum if you don't want it in the story. The fact that it isn't literally in the story gives it some oomph, so it would make me sad to change it.

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 28, 2014 11:25 pm 
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One of the nice things about having stuff like a wiki and a timeline is that some information can be fluidly included without a vote--sort of consensus reality. We all know this is Ellia, we're voting as though it's Ellia, and most folks reading it will read it in the context of the Endbringer War or Ellia's wider narrative, so that information doesn't need to be contained within the story itself necessarily.

Which I personally find very intriguing and potentially very freeing. (I mean, the timeline is already constructed of extracanonical information since almost none of the dates come from within stories)


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PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2014 10:07 pm 
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Horrifying and captivating. I shared this with an ex-F&S friend of mine today (Mercer--remember him?) and he loved it, if one can describe oneself as loving a story like this.


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PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2014 10:39 pm 
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Reading it makes me feel like I need to brush my teeth with ice cream to get the taste of sadness out of my mouth.

Easy "yea."

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 04, 2014 10:43 pm 
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Yeah, I remember Mercer! Kinda nice to know he still exists.

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As I said in the original thread, this is my kind of story. Very grim, admittedly, by just the right level of chilling. Plus, it's our first solid story of the Cabal, making it an important piece for a few different reasons. "Yea" here.


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Yeah, this is, uh, pretty creepy. Not... much more to say, other than I think it's an important look into the sort of dynamics oldwalkers have with mortals.

Yea.

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