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He had been raised to belief that emotions served their purpose
I think that should be "believe", but I could be wrong.
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The tears came freely as he turned his back on friend.
Should be "on his friend".
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and the villages knew they did not stand a chance against even a fraction of this massive army,
Should be "villagers".
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So, unsurprisingly, I really like this piece. It may not be one I'd be shouting at people to go and read, but it's got a quiet sense of quality, like Lukrin's sad smile, that makes the story as a whole really, extremely good.
At first I questioned your use of Kobolds, since I know the creature more from the D&D side of things, but a quick query to Salvation tells me that Kobolds are an uncommon creature type in Magic, as well.
But really, I love how it all fits together so well in terms of Magic without being quite so high-fantasy as our average story is. I love the way you work in the
and
cultures without them feeling overly-forced and giving them such a human feel. Working in the card's mechanics in more ways than one was almost a master stroke.
I
almost had that same feeling as I did with OL's first Beryl story (Small Magic), in that on the surface this doesn't really have the typical feel of a Magic story; but when I took a second look at the card, I realized how perfectly it fit into Magic's domain that I never really should have questioned it.
Yea from I.
EDIT: I should probably add how I'd kind of half-forgotten that expanded canon like this is totally under the M:EM's scope.