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 Post subject: started a story
PostPosted: Wed Sep 06, 2017 6:02 pm 
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so I started a new story and ended up with two different versions, and would like to know what you all think of them:

version 1


version 2


I'm also considering merging them

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 Post subject: Re: started a story
PostPosted: Sun Oct 08, 2017 1:53 am 
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I think the first one has more promise, but I feel that Kellina would be a bit more skeptical initially; you don't become a criminal by being over-trusting.

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