I made a card set of over 300 cards

Yeah felis, you're entirely incapable of using writing as a creative method to manipulate people and have never, ever done it it, like, ever never ever neverx2.

Who's this felis guy? I don't know any felis guy. <_< >_>

I dunno, but I'm pretty sure he has all my cat points.

Rough catpoints timeline:
-I create catpoints
-I promise people catpoints
-I forget to give people catpoints
-WOTC forums update
-I join NGA
-I realize I don't know how to make a sig on NGA anyways

Well it made me want to post thoughtful things outside the limited forums for like three days.

Now all I feel is disappointment.

Catpoints being posted in my signature is like a thermometer. If you break the thermometer, does it stop being warm? The true catpoints are in my heart. And you have a slightly to moderately above average number of them. Now go make some thoughtful posts.

Also, I think I'll start giving out catpoints again, even if I don't keep track of them.

ode to catpoints, haiku by sarah

oh, to have catpoints
would surely be a sweet thing
falling cherry blossoms

K, back to poetry. This is one of my first favorite poems, where I finally "got" how poetry can have a surface meaning, while employing suggested ambiguity to have a secondary meaning:

Not Waving but Drowning
Stevie Smith

Nobody heard him, the dead man,
But still he lay moaning:
I was much further out than you thought
And not waving but drowning.

Poor chap, he always loved larking
And now he's dead
It must have been too cold for him his heart gave way,
They said.

Oh, no no no, it was too cold always
(Still the dead one lay moaning)
I was much too far out all my life
And not waving but drowning.

^ insightful post

i like the part where it mentions casual sex

I think I would change it up a bit:

how do we go
from daily liking
each others' instagram
to casual sex

Since "how do we go" and "daily liking" sound cute and almost fairy-tale-like, which is then modernized by "instagram" and brought home by "casual sex" / impending penetration and fluid exchange. I feel like there could be a line after "instagram" that adds to the buildup, something like "to what we want:" and take out the "to" so it reads: "how do we go / from daily liking / each others' instagram / to what we want: / casual sex."

/ramble

EDIT: I guess the "what we want" implies mutual attraction; you could always make it "I" or just ignore me altogether.

There are advantages and disadvantages to "I" and "we". "I" is obviously more personal and shows the creator is the subject but you also allow the reader, when reading aloud, to put themselves into that position. With "we" you can refer to the two people who are involved in the action but also we in a more general sense of people and interactions and some greater sense of interactions based on technology. Something like that.

I took out "photos" because it's extraneous information -- the only thing to like on instagram is photos.

The thing with natural line breaks is that, in lines so short, they look arbitrary, not natural. So what you gain by controlling them, I feel, is more than what you gain by making them look like prose. I'm not saying you're wrong--I think the original is perfect as is--just saying this is how I'd handle it. I also come from a more narrative school that often relegates turns/epiphanies to the end of the poem, which has the unfortunate side effect of occasionally Billy Collinsing the **** out of lyrical work.

I'm good at poetry
it's basically symmetry
with words
and swords