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[Story][Audience Participation] Phantoms of the Past -- Chapter 2 complete!
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Author:  Tevish Szat [ Mon Sep 01, 2014 9:04 pm ]
Post subject:  [Story][Audience Participation] Phantoms of the Past -- Chapter 2 complete!

Howdy! Well, after my scheme to run the "M:EM adventure" fell through, I started thinking about what I might do next in the M:EM. That turned out to be the Dark Illarion Saga (sorta) but at the same time I started brewing a new story. I worked out a general outline, but I realized something as I was doing so

There were a lot of details in this story that could go down a number of ways, even ways that would determine the fate of characters. So, I did some more outlining, and I figured I could work in the different plot forks as an Audience Participation game! So, every chapter (Or so, the outline isn't perfect 1:1 chapter:choice), I'll post a poll question on what a character should do or, potentially, on how the story should progress in a different way, and abide by the winner of the poll for the next update.

This story will run 9 chapters, plus prologue and epilogue. They'll probably be pretty short, if the Prologue chapter is anything to go by, though again I make no promises on that score. The story may or may not end up introducing one or more new or psuedo-new characters to the M:EM.

The prologue is ready and you already have a very important choice to make...


Prologue

Part 1

Part 2

Author:  RavenoftheBlack [ Mon Sep 01, 2014 9:16 pm ]
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Well, I'm interested. Do you want us to post here (I can delete this if you don't) or just vote?

Author:  Tevish Szat [ Mon Sep 01, 2014 9:17 pm ]
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Go ahead and post and discuss! I'd like to see and hear what people are thinking!

Author:  Tevish Szat [ Tue Sep 02, 2014 10:44 pm ]
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Since this is the prologue, I'll move along having given it a day. Future votes will be up for at least a few days.

In this particular case, I've ended up casting a tiebreaker vote. The position of the tiebreaker vote was decided by a coin toss. I hope I won't have to do that too often, but I won't vote unless it is a tiebreaker, so there's that.

It looks like Sorinne is accepting the voices offer. Let's see how that goes for her....



Spoiler


Chapter 1 should begin soon, contingent on how long moving-related projects take me tomorrow an how much writing I get done tonight.

Author:  Daedalus [ Wed Sep 03, 2014 1:42 pm ]
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...She may have made a mistake. Of course, it's possible that the monster would have taken her anyway, and it might have gone worse. Well, plot anyway. Tally-ho!

Author:  Tevish Szat [ Wed Sep 03, 2014 6:01 pm ]
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I'll reveal spoilers about what could have gone differently in the end ;)

Working on Part 1 right now, which introduces us to at least one major character.

Author:  Tevish Szat [ Wed Sep 03, 2014 8:29 pm ]
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Part 1 Prevote



***

Well, the question right now is pretty open -- What kind of magic does Mattias want to learn from Metal? She might have her own color preferences, but she can lay the groundwork for any of the disciplines listed in the poll (if you're reading this in the couple minutes while I'm editing the OP with the new poll, then it's coming). The results of this vote -- which I'll leave run for a couple days -- might lens something of how I write Mattias, but more than that it will determine what sorts of spells he'll use going forward.

This chapter (so far) also introduces elements of the pre-existing M:EM to the story: two, actually, though neither one is yet explicit!

Author:  chinkeeyong [ Thu Sep 04, 2014 7:27 am ]
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I'm getting eerie flashbacks to Efaruna Simulacrum...

I picked blue and red magic, because I think those are the kinds that Mattias is most likely to be curious about. Artifice and forging.

Author:  OrcishLibrarian [ Thu Sep 04, 2014 1:52 pm ]
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Hrmm...

I went with blue, because it seems like the most obvious fit, and green, because that seemed much less obvious, and maybe it would reveal something we haven't yet seen.

Author:  Daedalus [ Fri Sep 05, 2014 10:00 am ]
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Gonna throw my vote for blue and red, because blue is traditional artifice and red now has Purphoros and UR has the Izzet. Mostly involving Metal saying "This would be so much easier if you could just store mana crystals and discharge them at will."

Author:  Tevish Szat [ Sat Sep 06, 2014 2:01 am ]
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One day left, and blue is in the lead with 3 votes... but red and green have rallied a second vote each! they're within striking distance of forcing a tiebreaker, maybe even of taking over the top slot. White has a single vote, and no one seems to care for the idea of Mattias learning black magic

Author:  RavenoftheBlack [ Sat Sep 06, 2014 4:08 pm ]
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I chose blue and green. Just judging from what we've seen of Mattias so far, those just sort of feel right for him to me.

Author:  RuwinReborn [ Sat Sep 06, 2014 8:00 pm ]
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I voted and am reading, but cannot comment extensively as of now.

Thanks for posting, Tevish!

Author:  Tevish Szat [ Sat Sep 06, 2014 10:24 pm ]
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And it looks like Mattias will be focusing his studies on Blue magic! Let's see what happens in the rest of chapter 1!
Spoiler


Chapter 2 coming Soontm

Author:  Tevish Szat [ Sun Sep 07, 2014 2:28 pm ]
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New poll up. It'll run until we're deep enough into chapter 2 to get its Audience Participation vote.

As always, discussion is more than welcome.

Author:  Daedalus [ Sun Sep 07, 2014 2:48 pm ]
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I cast my vote for "show now," but I'd like to add a caveat: Put the info in a spoiler, so I can read the chapter and then know the info. Just sayin'.

Author:  Tevish Szat [ Sun Sep 07, 2014 7:03 pm ]
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So, this came up a lot faster than I thought it would and the interim poll got only one vote. Since that vote was aligned with my own instincts, It's what I'm going to go with.

***

Chapter 2

Metal watched in horror as the shadows swallowed Mattias, and he vanished from her sight. The woman seemed to have only passing fascination at the scene.

“Strange.” She said, “I… I think he didn’t die.” She sounded relieved, but this did not matter to Metal

The woman turned back to Metal. “That won’t save you, though.”

Metal processed the matter. If Mattias was dead, she had no more incentive to do anything other than flee this fight – without the rest of her memories of magic and her own functionality, she couldn’t expect to win. If he was alive, he was elsewhere, and she should endeavor to find him.

Either way, remaining in combat was not optimal.

Metal countered another bolt of red magic, and then threw her own lightning blast. The woman ducked, falling to the floor, and that was all the chance that Metal needed. Mana flowed through her, and she entered the Blind Eternities.

Metal’s mind was quick. It had been getting quicker as she repaired herself, though the rate of improvement had slowed significantly. Still, though, it was enough different now than within recent memory to be noticeable. She processed the worlds she saw, and before she even knew what she was doing she jumped to one, then another, then another. After fifteen jumps, she re-oriented herself in the Blind Eternities.

That term, like many others, had come along with her sudden understanding of the word ‘Planeswalker’. Yes, that was what she was. She was a planeswalker, she traveled through the Blind Eternities. Her travel left an Æther Trail. The Æther Trail could be traced, hence why she had made the long sequence of jumps. Conscious realization of these facts came only after action.

She landed on another plane, one that was right before her at the end of the twisted sequence of Planeswalks. Some part of her seemed to remember it, seemed to know that it was a good place. How many memories had been half-unlocked by that one fact? What was ‘planeswalker’ the key to?

It was mid day where Metal arrived. Though it had been late evening, and though her sequence of planeswalks had taken some time, Metal did not tire. As far as she knew, she neither required nor longed for sleep, perhaps was not even capable of it. This was good, for if she ever dreamed she would have thought herself dreaming to behold the sight before her.

Metal was in a small town, except everyone in it was mechanical. She could hear the faint ticking of clockwork, could see the metal sheen of their parts, and could understand why her mind had guided her to this place. Metal knew she was something different, but of all the planes, this was one she could hide in.

It seemed not to many had seen her appearance, or if they had they did not wonder at it. Quickly and quietly, Metal was able to speak to those people, who took her to be one of their own ‘Aridon’ despite some significant differences between herself and what she saw in them. They were a kind sort, at least those she had encountered, and assuming her to have been the victim of some foul play, gave her clothes after their own style (one she guessed was borrowed from humans for they had even less anatomy than the image of the same that Metal’s form presented) and lent her a place to ‘rest’ and the tools she required.

Alone and feeling safe, Metal took an inventory of her systems. Looking inward, she felt that a great deal of her magic was still out of reach, the memories locked away behind the barriers she had put in place during her long isolation.

Part of her wanted to unlock all of them, right away. That woman, the one who had tried to kill her and Mattias, presented a real threat and Metal would need her magical power, which meant, more or less, her memories.

At the same time, it was a frightening prospect. The longer she had waited to regain her old self, the more she had come to think of herself as Metal, as a person aside from the few glimpses of a long history that improving her systems had given her. If she simply released it all, that torrent of memories into her mind, would Metal die to be replaced by the woman who once was, who had a name?

If she took it slowly, she felt, she would retain continuity. Whether the person she was was the same as Metal now or different, she could reconcile them, and avoid any risk of part of her dying at the hands of another.

For now, it would do.

Magic remained partially hidden. Whatever part made her a planeswalker, Metal could not even recognize. The primary functions of her body were on-line… except, she realized, for one. She had flight systems! Now, that was something to work towards, that would reward the intertwining of capabilities with memory. It would be good to recall how to fly, and what it felt like, at the same time she recovered the ability.

With that in mind, Metal set to work. Schematics came bidden to her conciousness, and she began to inspect and repair. Her clever joints allowed her hands to reach any point on her body for maintenance, so even the largest parts, mana-driven jets hidden when not in use as the swell of human shoulder-blades, were not difficult to operate on.

As she tinkered, she braced herself. Her body knew her better than she did, and when it decided she had largely finished, that was when she would remember. She finished the small adjustments of crystals in the thrusters, and opened them up, letting free a small amount of blazing exhaust that made her realize why she had built herself so resilient to heat. Yes, that was good. Stabilizing elements existed on her feet, ankles, wrists, and palms. They would allow her good maneuverability at speed, and the ability to hover in nearly any position. Still, as she applied the finishing touches, she felt that compared to the wings of an ornithopter, she seemed somewhat overengineered…

This memory was different, the sensation dull to nonexistent but action, sight, continuity… Metal saw the world through the eyes of someone small. A child? She felt pain, somewhere. She looked up, and saw a pair of humans with pure-white wings looking down on her, their faces full of concern, sadness. She looked around herself – there were masses of feathers in her hands, broken quills of dappled grey. There was also blood, and far too much of it. The floor was strewn with violent molt and crimson stains. A pair of scissors lay near Metal/The Girl’s feet, amidst one of the thicker piles of feather bits, bloodstained as well

“What have you done?” the male demanded, “What have you done?!” The female adult broke from her stunned shock, and rushed towards The Girl/Metal and embraced her before pulling on a… limb. A wing.

“Oh, you poor dear!” the white-winged woman exclaimed, “Just look at yourself!”

She faced The Girl/Metal towards a large mirror. She saw a girl, human but for the wings of dull grey dappled with darker spots. The wings were ragged, bleeding from broken feathers, or where others had been ripped out haphazardly. The girl’s bright green eyes were blood-shot, her blonde hair was a tangled mess, and her pale face was streaked with tears. Pain? Rage? Metal felt both.

“Honey, your wings…”

“I hate them!” The girl cried, “I hate them! I wish I never had them like this!”

“Honey,” the woman said, “You know that’s not true. You love to fly, always have… you’ll be on the ground for a month, don’t you see that?”

“I’d walk on the ground forever if I didn’t have to have these!” the girl cried, “You don’t understand! You have white wings, like everybody else. The other kids – they say I’m evil, that there’s something wrong with me and they’re right! They throw sticks and rocks and you know the things they call me! If I didn’t have these awful spotty wings they’d just call me a groundling, and I could be like all the other groundlings!”

The adult woman embraced the child.

“It will pass,” she said, “I promise, darling. I love you just the way you are, and when you’re older you’ll see that the world feels just the same.”

The girl sniffled, and seemed to accept her mother’s love at least. But still she felt pain in her heart, and fear crept in as well. “Then why don’t I see any adults that don’t have white wings?”


Metal returned to reality, to the present, trembling from the emotions that had played through her and more.

Whose memory was that? Was it her creator? Was that why Metal had been made to fly without wings?

It had to be, Metal told herself. Her maker must have given her that understanding, the knowledge of why she had done what she had done in such a way. There… there could not be any other explanation. She did not know why she had been given a memory, rather than just an explanation, but as with the flight system itself, there had to be a reason.

For the next few days after that, though, Metal took her reactivation very slowly. She reconnected with old mana-bonds, and laid the finishing touches on her physical body. The memories that came with those bits were never so intense – brief vistas of far off planes, glimpses of her making additions to her body or, rarely, why. When she discovered the blade concealed at the back of her left wrist, she saw herself in combat, pinned by some monster, and forced to flee by planeswalk for all she could do with her arms was flail uselessly. Yet somehow that moment of fear that had forced her to add a weapon to her design, at the risk of marring the form her creator had given her, was not so fierce or horrifying as the girl with the dappled-grey wings.

On Metal’s fifth day among the Aridon, there passed among them a rumor. A woman had appeared in one of the nearby cities of the humans and had started asking about a metal woman, only to find herself presented with half a dozen Aridon the humans had waylaid and hauled before her. Each one, the woman had rejected in frustration. One of the Aridon of this village had been there, had seen what the woman did next.

“It was strange.” The Aridon related, “She seemed to change moods very quickly. And she said ‘No matter, she can hide here all she wants. She hid one of the pieces, too, and that will be easier to find.’ Then the woman set out for the mountains of the west, enlisting a trio of the Devotees to guide her.”

There was no doubt in Metal’s mind that this was the same woman who had hunted her before, up to the same tricks she had tried on Mattias’ world, only to find that here Metal did not look unique.

On one hand, it offered a reprieve.

On the other hand, it seemed the woman Metal had been had tried to keep something from this other woman. When the strange woman was willing to murder, it occurred to Metal that whatever ‘piece’ she wanted she ought to not get.

Metal looked down at herself. She was stronger now, and if she went after the woman she would have a better chance of success than the first time they had clashed.

If Metal waited longer, she would only become stronger. The word Planeswalker sang in her mind, faint glimmers of terrible power. Yes, the woman needed to be stopped. But yes, she was likely very mighty. Metal could expedite the recovery of her memories, but only to an extent without risking that nagging death by transformation into another person.

So to chase after the woman as she was, or to wait until she could do so at full strength? It was a terrible decision, but it was one she had to make.

***

Metal sums up her choice pretty well. To recover her memories safely, it will take a couple days that Sorinne could use to find whatever she's looking for, but flying off right now would risk leaving Metal still outclassed by Sorinne. What to do, what to do?

Author:  Tevish Szat [ Sun Sep 07, 2014 9:18 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: [Story][Audience Participation] Phantoms of the Past -- Chapter 2 vote is up!

Supplemental Data: The plane of Kalishin

Author:  Daedalus [ Sun Sep 07, 2014 9:57 pm ]
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Yeah, I'm gonna say "chase NOW." Sorinne can't get what she's after-especially since we know she's possessed by what's likely a black-red or mono-black spirit. Nothing good can come of that. Metal may face trouble, but she was doing okay with her counterspells. And she can fly now. Just find what Sorinne's looking for, swoop in, grab it, swoop out, and leave Sorinne raging helplessly.

Aaand that would make for a terrible, terrible story-too easy. Well, we can dream.

Author:  Aaarrrgh [ Tue Sep 09, 2014 12:12 am ]
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I voted for waiting. I have a feeling that rushing into this could trigger a hostile takeover by Metal's former personality, which might be bad. I like her the way she is, and don't want her to lose who she has become.

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