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[Story] The Spell Trader
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Author:  RavenoftheBlack [ Mon Sep 16, 2019 10:35 pm ]
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The Spell Trader


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Author:  razorborne [ Tue Sep 17, 2019 3:21 pm ]
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very interesting! I'm not personally much for love stories but I think this was well-executed. lots of world-building and character-building here, all of which pays off well.

:duel:

Author:  RavenoftheBlack [ Tue Sep 17, 2019 8:00 pm ]
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razorborne wrote:
very interesting! I'm not personally much for love stories but I think this was well-executed. lots of world-building and character-building here, all of which pays off well.

:duel:

Thanks for reading and commenting, razor! I appreciate it. The world and character building was a lot of fun to work through, and layers seemed to keep adding themselves as I was writing. I don't tend to do a whole lot of first person POV, and Dyson is a bit more brutally honest about himself than some of my characters are, so it was really interesting to write in his voice.

Thanks again for reading!

Author:  Huey Nomure [ Fri Sep 27, 2019 12:43 pm ]
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Nice! I'm always struck by the stories of lost chances and missed opportunities. I'd be interested in knowing why only the academics in the :u: land had strong opinions about Dyson's trade, since I suppose his ability is quite unique, and other than that a plane where magical knowledge is so closely guarded and linked to social status (at least in the Peaks) would be interesting to play with.

I realized a bit late the :wb:-ness of Milisolan, completing the mana wheel of Dyson's travels, though the forest was the most egregious hint at the mana dynamics underlying Dyson's skill, I think. While the piece has a very good origin for the character, and a romantic plot that is both simple and delicate, I don't get what Dyson's gonna be doing from now on. The "looking back for home" is easy to get as a motivation, and his spellcards are unique enough to be a good conversation starter with basically any character (Elphimas would be SO interested) but I'd have liked if there was some hints about what adventures he's going to have, also because I get the feeling his relation with his trade is gonna worsen a bit since it appears to have been some sort of distraction at times.

Thanks for sharing!

Author:  RavenoftheBlack [ Fri Sep 27, 2019 7:10 pm ]
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Nice!

Thanks! I was fond of this one.

I'm always struck by the stories of lost chances and missed opportunities.

One thing I like about the narrative voice that Dyson developed while I was writing is that there is, at least to me, a sort of melancholy about him, but I don't get the sense that he is overcome by it. He has a regretful tone, I think, but not a morose one, again at least to me. Hopefully, that will give him more to do in the future than obsessively pine over Saralyn.

I'd be interested in knowing why only the academics in the :u: land had strong opinions about Dyson's trade, since I suppose his ability is quite unique,

The way I looked at it, I figured the spell trade benefitted both parties, so the only people who would really have a problem with it were those also in the business of "selling" spells, thus the academies. I suppose the families, protecting their family spells, might have a problem with it, but if they're also getting spells of rival families, maybe it evens out. It's also likely that the families are not trading for their best spells, but more dispensable ones.

and other than that a plane where magical knowledge is so closely guarded and linked to social status (at least in the Peaks) would be interesting to play with.

If you or anyone else wants to set a story on this plane, or just develop it more fully, I would certainly support that. It doesn't even have a name yet!

:)

I realized a bit late the :wb:-ness of Milisolan, completing the mana wheel of Dyson's travels, though the forest was the most egregious hint at the mana dynamics underlying Dyson's skill, I think.

I do mention a -aligned place in this story once, the Canal Marshes, but yes, I envision Milisolan as place. I think it leans more in general, but there is definitely an undercurrent to the city and the empire in general.

While the piece has a very good origin for the character, and a romantic plot that is both simple and delicate, I don't get what Dyson's gonna be doing from now on. The "looking back for home" is easy to get as a motivation, and his spellcards are unique enough to be a good conversation starter with basically any character (Elphimas would be SO interested) but I'd have liked if there was some hints about what adventures he's going to have, also because I get the feeling his relation with his trade is gonna worsen a bit since it appears to have been some sort of distraction at times.

I do have a few ideas for where this goes from here, but I agree that this is a fairly close-ended stories, which is a bit different for me. I often like to leave my stories with the breadcrumbs of future tales, and this one doesn't do that as much. Having said that, though, there are a couple of options with the story. The penultimate paragraph has Dyson expressing his willingness to trade pretty much everything to see Saralyn again, and this story also features a poem from a certain poet who has been known to make deals...

:plot:

Not that that's necessarily my plan, of course, but it is something to think about. And as you say, Dyson's habitual spell-trading might very well distract him from his search. Or, depending on what sorts of spells he finds, that search might change its purpose.

Thanks for sharing!

And thank you for reading!

Author:  OrcishLibrarian [ Sat Nov 16, 2019 10:05 pm ]
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Don't think I don't see what you did there, you wonderful, wonderful Raven. :D

I don't get what Dyson's gonna be doing from now on.

Well, assuming that we consider "The Basement Tapes" to be a bootleg compilation rather than a studio album (and we do), that would suggest that next comes the story of the hurricane... :plot:

Author:  RavenoftheBlack [ Sun Nov 17, 2019 12:04 pm ]
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Don't think I don't see what you did there, you wonderful, wonderful Raven. :D

I'm sure I don't know what you're talking about. As usual with my stories, there is certainly nothing hidden here, no secret references or anything...

:paranoid:

Incidentally, can you guess the line that convinced me to write this?

I don't get what Dyson's gonna be doing from now on.

Well, assuming that we consider "The Basement Tapes" to be a bootleg compilation rather than a studio album (and we do), that would suggest that next comes the story of the hurricane... :plot:

Ahh, but the Hurricane is off-color for Dyson...

:D

Thanks for reading, Orcish. If you would like to read more of Dyson, check out "Dyson's Fear." And of course, always feel welcome to feature Dyson in a story of your own, if you so desire.

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