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PostPosted: Sat Jul 26, 2014 10:28 pm 
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Have you decided yet whether to include the Interlude portion? Because I'd still advise you split that off into its own thing and have the first two and the final parts flow seamlessly together.

To Choose Freedom... yeah I think that could work. It sets up some really interesting contrasts. I dig it.


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PostPosted: Sat Jul 26, 2014 11:14 pm 
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Have you decided yet whether to include the Interlude portion? Because I'd still advise you split that off into its own thing and have the first two and the final parts flow seamlessly together.

To Choose Freedom... yeah I think that could work. It sets up some really interesting contrasts. I dig it.

I intend to split Interlude off to be its own thing still.

And the more I've sat on it, I think I prefer "The Choice of Freedom" rather than To Choose Freedom.
It feels like it has slightly more weight to it.

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PostPosted: Sat Jul 26, 2014 11:54 pm 
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Mm, yup, I'm with you. Soon as I read it it clicked better with me.


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