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PostPosted: Sat Feb 04, 2023 3:27 pm 
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Hello, all! So, I'm travelling right now, and so I found myself with a lot of extra time sitting in a hotel room, so I decided to take a stab at a story I've been hoping to write for quite a while now. This is another entry in the ongoing "series" or "Tales of the Dominia Cabal" line of stories, which to date features precisely one other story: "Tales of the Dominia Cabal: Lucien," posted way back in 2015. This story does not have any direct connection to that one, although there are a couple of characters in common between the two stories. You do not have to have read that story to understand this one, and, in fact, this story takes place significantly before that one in terms of a timeline.

Because this was written on a laptop instead of my regular desktop writing PC, and because I am running out of time before I need to be somewhere, this story has not been proofread nearly as carefully as most of my stuff, so in all likelihood, there are probably a lot of typos in this one. My apologies for that, and I will proofread this when I have adequate time to do so, but for the time being, I just wanted to get this posted so I don't risk losing it in the hopefully unlikely event that my computer dies on me.

Anyway, I hope you all enjoy!

Tales of the Domnia Cabal: Dathra


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I like touching on this era, and that this was a (relatively, what with the threat of death and all) tame Recruitment piece.

Though it reminds me both that I need to finish the story I started a while ago, and that I had the seed of an idea for Ciretasta...

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PostPosted: Mon Feb 06, 2023 4:35 pm 
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I like touching on this era, and that this was a (relatively, what with the threat of death and all) tame Recruitment piece.

I also enjoy the Dominia Cabal era (not surprisingly) and I liked the idea of showing how Dathra was brought into the mix, particularly after showcasing both her and Conath in "Tales of the Dominia Cabal: Lucien," and showing how they were drifting apart at that point. The threat of death you mentioned came fairly late in the process, as Dathra's character wound up being a bit more antagonistic than I had originally planned, and it became clear to me that she would need a bit more extreme forms of motivation, both to recruit her and to ignite her spark.

Though it reminds me both that I need to finish the story I started a while ago, and that I had the seed of an idea for Ciretasta...

Well, that's exciting! I admit, I had to look up Ciretasta, as I did not remember off-hand the various drop-in comments regarding it, but I've always liked that kind of hint dropping. It also reminds me that I never did get around to developing the plane of Sanctuary, either.

Thanks for reading, Tevish!

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I neglected to mention this when I first posted the story, but this story was one that I had included on my old "What Would Raven Write" thread. I said in that thread that I would explain my strange naming logic, so I will do that now.

This story was originally listed as Project Solitude. This is a weird one, even by my standards. This story centers around a Fair. A synonym for "fair" is "just." In another usage, "just" is a synonym for "only." "Only" is a similar concept to "alone." And of course, "Alone" is a synonym for "Solitude." That is why this was Project Solitude.

And that's how my mind works... :D


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Ooo, very cool! For the opening censored swearword and the overall vibe of the first half of the piece, I admit I find myself linking Dathra with Orida somewhat :D Anyway, her attitude and dynamic with Conath slot perfectly in what I remember in Lucien's Tale - even her talent and interest in unconventional energy sources, which foreshadows the deployment and confident use of the Manafolds. With all due reserves about her motives, I even share the frustration with the fair judges, penalizing brilliant theoretical designs that could lead to monumental breakthroughs - the research for a suitable energy source for her thopter could lead to more discoveries on its own, and even if that wasn't the case studying the design itself one could find new applications for the ideas she worked in her prototype.

...feelings about scientific blinkers aside, I loved this piece, I think it's a great way to properly introduce the LocTierans and it made me itch to pick back up the tale of Lucien's knight. Thank you for sharing!

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Ooo, very cool! For the opening censored swearword and the overall vibe of the first half of the piece, I admit I find myself linking Dathra with Orida somewhat :D

Yeah, that thought definitely occurred to me, too. And I do think they have some strong similarities, especially after Dathra's lack of success in the first Innleachd Latha. I'm sure she felt a bit betrayed by her clan after that, although her social ostracism would be nowhere near as deep as Orida's. But yeah, like Orida, I don't see Datha as a sort of person who takes crap from people if she doesn't have to (she probably doesn't mouth off to the Master, for instance... :shudder: ).

Anyway, her attitude and dynamic with Conath slot perfectly in what I remember in Lucien's Tale - even her talent and interest in unconventional energy sources, which foreshadows the deployment and confident use of the Manafolds.

Thanks! I'm glad this came through. That moment in "Lucien" when Dathra suggests the Manafolds, and insists to Conath that "They'll work," as if that had been his problem, has always been a favorite little moment in that story for me. Dathra's insistence throughout this piece that her theoretical designs would work, if they just had the necessary elements, was very much meant to echo that sentiment.

Also, can I just say how proud I am of the Manafold/manifold pun? Because I'm pretty proud of that... :D

With all due reserves about her motives, I even share the frustration with the fair judges, penalizing brilliant theoretical designs that could lead to monumental breakthroughs - the research for a suitable energy source for her thopter could lead to more discoveries on its own, and even if that wasn't the case studying the design itself one could find new applications for the ideas she worked in her prototype.

This was an interesting element to explore, as well, because it really does get to some deep philosophy about science and design, but I didn't want to bog the piece down too much with it. I like how her designs got more unfeasible as they went, yet also got more powerful, in their way. The Thopter is, essentially, just an upgrade, but it's pretty possible if, as you say, a better power source were to be developed. The Lava Dam can produce a great deal of energy, but would be nearly impossible to build (unless you have the power and resources of the Cabal, of course...). The Miasma Lake Energy Converter, if it works as Dathra claims it will, will provide vast amounts of power, but would require a natural phenomenon that does not exist on Xandroth. It is not hard for me to imagine the Cabal claiming Jad and filling those miasma lakes with countless reproductions of Dathra's device.

It's interesting to me that Conath is sort of a middle ground between the two extremes. He wants testing and proof, and as we saw in "Lucien," some degree of ethical use of the tech. But at the same time, he doesn't dismiss Dathra's inventions out of hand. Now, maybe that's just because he knows things the judges at the Faire don't know, like how to engineer a lava flow, or that miasma lakes exist on other planes. But it was interesting to me to see these two begin to come together, in a way, considering that in "Lucien," we see them begin to pull apart.

...feelings about scientific blinkers aside, I loved this piece, I think it's a great way to properly introduce the LocTierans and it made me itch to pick back up the tale of Lucien's knight. Thank you for sharing!

Well, I'm glad you enjoyed it! As I mentioned, this one has been on the list for quite a while, and I'm really glad that I was able to get it put together. I still need to go through a careful proofreading, but sadly, I've been sick the last couple of days, so I'm not sure when I'll be up for it.

I'm also glad that, for one reason or another, this has inspired others to want to work on specific projects, too. That feels pretty good!

Anyway, thanks for reading and for commenting!


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